Jul. 30th, 2007

I wrote this back in April, but wasn't happy with it, so left it for later revision. I'm still not happy with it, but I think it's never going to get that revision work, so here it is anyway.
In May he hurt you one time with madness -
his cruel words and lies, his jealous rage -
You talked him down again, in your sadness;
I comforted you and so set the stage.

July he hurt you one time, ruthlessly,
he threatened to destroy you with his mind.
You went to him, you left me, truthlessly.
You showed him how it pays to be unkind.

Two more times that he hurt you, when you swore
you'd ended it, you'd never let him back.
You knew one day the words would lead to more,
to fists and to your blue eyes swollen black.

The next time that he hurts you, will that be?
And after that? Your friends can't bear to see.
Woke up in the night with a fix for the scansion; I think this is better now

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